Unit 21 M2: Amending pitch and proposal

Overall refection on the pitch:
     I was happy with how my pitch went, both in how I presented it, the way I responded to questions and the reaction from the audience I had. Going into the pitch itself I was really confident with the idea and the details I had thought about for it so I knew that almost no question could surprise me when it came to the questions. It was just a matter of getting over my small stammer, but once I started the pitch I knew what I was going to say and how I was going to deliver the pitch. Considering the minimal preparation time I gave myself, I was really happy with the topic areas I covered however, after finishing I did realise the minor areas I forgot to mention about, like actually saying what would happen in the pilot episode. My body language was good, focusing on addressing the mass audience and turning around on frequent occasions to ensure i was addressing everyone and that everyone was listening and engaged. I  believe I spoke clearly and confidently to people as well as ensuring that I wasn't going too fast for the audience to keep up. I think I could've improved the structure a little because there were parts where I repeated myself and although some of the times were intentional to make sure people understood where I was coming from and what I meant, it was not always needed, I also needed to make it more of a sales pitch than just giving information and my idea to them.

I don't think that the presentation was branded enough and memorable enough in terms of the aesthetics. I also think that there was too much text on a lot of the pages because of the amount of detail I wanted to go into, however I did somewhat resolve this issue by making all the key terms and lines in a different colour, usually red. This made the reading more manageable for the audience as they could just read those lines and mixed with what I was saying to them, I hope they got an image of exactly what I was saying and could interpret my words and vision for the show. To further explain my vision I used stills from some of the shows that inspired me as well as videos from two of the shows to give the audience a stronger vision of what the elements of the show I was describing would actually look like. Looking back I do think that despite the usefulness of the videos, I could've got them pre-prepared to reduce the hassle of getting them up and running. I was strongly considering playing my chosen soundtrack ("Quiet" by Ibibio Sound Machine) in the background as I did the presentation but in the end, I decided to leave it because I knew it would finish and play the next video way before I finished the pitch. I do however think that the videos and pictures were effective in giving the audience a visual image of what the show would look and sound like.

I included a lot of the content that was needed to be covered like the title, executive summary, statement of need, format of the show, duration of episodes and length of the series, budget, character profiles accompanied with possible actors and actresses, possible soundtracks to be used and a rough series narrative. However, I did forget to mention the pilot details and the production companies I could use to produce the show.

Unfortunately, I didn't have any supporting documents because the script scene I was writing was not complete and I had not started drawing the storyboard. For the real pitch, I will ensure that I will have all supporting documents and a real and completed working title ready to show.

Fortunately I covered most of the topics that would have likely been questions about the show and my pitch, however there was areas that I couldn't cover and these came up in the questions. One of them was about how I was going to make the show not as depressing as it seemed it would be. This is going to be solved through Temi's story arc through the first part of the season and then through Lucy's story arc through the second part of the season as we see what each of them do in the circumstances they find themselves in. Another concern that arose was the safety of the cast and crew when filming at sea. As mentioned in the video, I would reduce the risk for the actors and crew by ensuring a thorough and detailed weather watch and report has been taken before we go out and shoot. As well as this, because weather can be unpredictable, I will have coastal a safety guard or an organisation like the RNLI with us at sea at all times and will ensure that only the necessary people are on the boats as we don't want to have any injured. If this is too complicated to do or not possible to do, we can film these scenes in a separate safer location to ensure the safety of all crew and staff. Because of the detail I had given and thought about I believe there was almost nothing that would've caught me out in the questions.

I know that the questions asked at the end of the pitch, along with the gaps I found when reviewing the pitch will all be easy to answer once I go through the plot and the pitch once more. This should help me with the real pitch in May.